Whats bad about my paper

Whats bad about my paper?
So...I'm a terrible writer. For Honors English I needed to write a paper that connects a news article to the book, The Curious Incident of The Dog in the Night-Time Article for the Curious Incident of the Dog in the Night-Time:http://www.cbsnews.com/stories/2006/07/19/earlyshow/main1817689.shtml Basically about a boy who's blind that learns how to see with echolocation. My terrible paper: The news article “How a Blind Teen ‘Sees’ With Sound” relates to the book The Curious Incident of the dog in the night-time in various ways. Christopher and the boy from the article, Ben Underwood, both want to be independent and not doubted. They both strive to have they’re abilities used to their full potential. Both of them work hard to get what they want. One similarity is that Christopher and Ben both accomplished something unthinkable and amazing. Christopher found his mother, going through an extremely populated city. He made it into the math class he wanted, and he found out the murderer of Wellington all on his own. Ben can play video games, roller skate, play foosball and win in a pillow fight. Ben is blind, and has been since cancer took his sight at the age of two. Another similarity is that neither of them gave up. For most children, they might give up or be discouraged. Some might isolate themselves or become depressed, but instead they found a solution. For Christopher his teachers and principal said that he couldn’t go into the A-Level math. But instead of just giving up there, he took his test to prove he deserved to be in it. When Ben lost his sight, he worked to compensate for his disability. He learned how to use echolocation so he could be independent. Lastly, Christopher and Ben both had supportive parents. Ben’s mother never held him back, or was overprotective. When most mothers might shelter their children with that sort of disability, and that could harm their learning experience. She let him have independence and helped him have freedom. Christopher’s father was always behind him with any challenge he wanted to take on. He went to the school to plead Christopher’s case to the board when he wanted to take the math class. He fought for custody against his ex-wife, he searched night and day for Christopher when he ran away. Having supportive parents when you have a disability is important so that the child can grow and take care of themselves. Ben Underwood could accomplish much more than any person would think. Christopher Boone knows more than any one could tell. Both of them can have a free life now. It would be helpful if I could know whats bad I'll answer any question in return!...Thank you!
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The fact that you wrote it.

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Which is One is the Better Choice

Which is One is the Better Choice?
Which description is better for a book? I really want to avoid sounding so dramatic. 1: A foggy mid-September morning in Somereset. Brenda Ortiz, 14, Latina, big brown eyes, purple waves, a freshmen arrives at the stairs of Wellington High School. Her black skull bandana tied around her head and her strapless red dress reveal her rebellious nature. 2: A foggy mid-September morning, Brenda Ortiz, Latina, 14, big brown eyes rides her bike down to Wellington High School. Her newly dyed purple stresses and the skull bandana worn around her head reveals her rebellious nature. She is the not the type of girl you would want to make upset. Which sounds better and what do I need to work on? Thanks for your advice.
Polls & Surveys - 2 Answers
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the first one because it leaves you to want to know more about the girl. also it sounds better than the second one which sounds almost like a bio than a story.
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The first one.

How likely is it that I will make it into NYU Tisch

How likely is it that I will make it into NYU Tisch?
This is pretty much my dream college. I'm a sophomore at a well known arts school. I major in Communications, and my focuses are on Film and Journalism. I've kept a resume of all of my work ever since elementary school. Here's an idea of what I've done... 1998-2004: Straight A’s K-5 30 hours of community service (cleaning up parks and volunteering at retirement homes) Reading Rainbow Writing Contest: 2nd Place Published book Chorus 4th and 5th grade (performed at Sea World, City Place, Veteran’s Hospital, Publix, and Roger Dean Stadium) Spotlight on Young Musicians (One of three students chosen from Binks Forest Elementary) Safety Patrol Web Design Club Presidential Award for Physical Fitness 2005: Acceptance into Bak Middle School of the Arts Winner of Young Heroes Essay contest Talent in 2005 Bak MSOA 6th Grade Showcase Outstanding in Communications 4.0 GPA first and second semester People To People: Young Student Ambassador in British Columbia and Alberta, Canada for two weeks. 2006: Member of 2006 Communications Showcase Staff Directed and Filmed “Spylvan Learning Center”, “Dirty Little Secret”, and “Earthquake” Directed, managed, advertised, and organized a walkathon for ALS Lou Gehrig’s Disease (Raised 2,000 dollars that were donated to the local ALS chapter and also auctioned off items including an iPod Nano that was donated by Apple) Assistant Editor in Chief of Masterpiece Yearbook Volume IX JEA Mail In Contest: Excellent in Feature Writing for Technology Spread Outstanding in Communications 4.0 GPA first and second semester 2007: JEA Mail In Contest: Excellent in Photography for Communications Spread Editor in Chief of Masterpiece Yearbook Volume X at Bak Middle School of the Arts Producer of 2007 Bak MSOA Communications Showcase Co-Writer of 2007 Bak MSOA Communications Showcase Designed graphics for 2007 Bak MSOA Communications Showcase Advanced Graphics student Outstanding in Communications 3.8571 GPA first and second semester 2008: Acceptance into Dreyfoos School of the Arts Published in The Muse Newsmagazine Photographed in The Wellington Magazine Mic Wrangler in 2008 Dreyfoos Communications Showcase Assistant to Technical Director in 2008 Dreyfoos Communications Showcase Stage Manager in 2008 Dreyfoos Communications Showcase Directed, Produced, and Edited “Subterfuge”, the only freshman film played in showcase as well as the annual Dreyfoos Film Festival Outstanding Achievement in Film and Television Production 30 hours for work with the Laura Brooke Music Foundation (edited a film and taped a benefit concert) 30 department hours for Communications Rank #34 out of 327, 11th percentile 3.8571 and 4.0 GPA first and second semester; 4.5 HPA All Honors Classes for 9th grade Passed the AP Human Geography Course in 9th grade Internship at International Quiksigns (50 Hours) Volunteer at Equestrian Trails Elementary Summer Camp (200 Hours) Produced, Edited, Created Bar Mitzvah video for Brandon Palaccio (5 Hours) Member of the Arts Section Staff for the Marquee, the Dreyfoos Yearbook publication All Honors Classes in 10th grade Took the AP World History Course in 10th grade Film Credentials: Took the Intro to Video Production Course in 6th grade Created a video, “Such Great Heights” Won an award for Excellence in Communications (Film) Took the TV Production Course in 7th grade Director/Camera for the daily announcements show, BAK MSOA Today Took the Video Editing Course in 7th grade Directed, Edited, Produced, Shot videos, including “Shpylvan Learning Center”, “Dirty Little Secret Music Video”, and “Earthquake.” Co-Producer and Co-Director of the 2008 Communications Showcase in 8th grade Created several videos used in the show, including the intro. Took the Research I (Film) Course in 9th grade Directed, Produced, Edited “Subterfuge”, the only Freshman film shown at the Annual Dreyfoos Film Festival as well as the Dreyfoos Communications Showcase Edited a film and taped the benefit concert for the Laura Brooke Music Foundation Produced, Edited, Created several Bar Mitzvah videos for Brandon Palaccio, Nicolas Rabinowitz, etc. And at a glance, here's my High School extracurriculars/serivce hours: 30 department hours for Communications (the required is 10) 20 hours for filming the benefit concert and producing/editing a video for the Laura Brooke Music Foundation 200 hours for volunteering at the Equestrian Trails Summer Camp for grades K-6 all summer. 5 hours for volunteering at Wellington Components, Inc. 24 hours for producing/editing several videos for various events/celebrations Those are my hours so far. Here are my extracurriculars: Showcase, Video Editing (for events/celebrations), Volunteer at Summer Camp, Helping the Laura Brooke Music Foundation. and in the future I will be on the Yearbook staff all three years left of High School. I will be going to the Soup Kitc
Higher Education (University +) - 1 Answers
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Tisch is about auditions and portfolios, not laundry lists off activities. We have no way to know. If you're talented, you'll get in.